I am grateful the peer review process has become more extensive in college. In high school, we would exchange papers for about 15 minutes. The reader would leave a few minimal comments on spelling and grammar and the occasional “good job.” This never really helped me as I could spot most of the grammatical errors and correct them myself after proof reading. College has taken this process to the next level, where global revision is focused on and I’m not afraid to give a peer more detailed feedback. I also get more constructive criticism that informs me on what the reader needs more of.  I don’t feel rushed nor stressed because I have a full class to sit with my peer’s work and give them thoughtful feedback.

My question here gives the writer an idea on how to connect themselves into the paragraph and make it a more engaging and effective Barclay paragraph. As the reader, I can feel that there is some disconnect between the sources and the writer’s own voice. Hopefully, my comment gave them insight on ways to expand their thinking. 

Comment on Peer’s Barclay Paragraph

End Comment on Peer’s Joy Essay

Above is my end comment on another peer’s work commends the specificity of some of their personal examples that really captured my attention. I leave insightful feedback on improving and adding source integration. As I read through my peers’ drafts, I find new strategies on how others incorporate ideas and support their theses. I also remember all the things I need to include in my essay which I may have forgotten, like naysayers and integrating more sources. I really enjoy this in depth peer review process we have used in WRT 110 because it’s helped me revise my essays to become as strong as possible. 

Receiving constructive criticism from a peer always brings my attention to where my essay needs the most work. These two comments below made me realize that I spent too much time summarizing a story and hardly related it back to its bigger purpose in my essay. 

Peer Review Feedback on Interview Body Paragraph

I was able to take this feedback into my revision process where I cut down on summary and brought more of my own voice in. I really appreciated receiving these insightful comments because they helped even my “They Say,” “I Say” proportions and gave meaning to the special stories my grandfather shared when I interviewed him. This paragraph transformation is shown in my revision learning outcome tab!